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Adalberto’s Corner

by Venky

(Goizueta, Navarre | © Google Maps)

Adalberto neither knew the machinations of politics nor the motivations of politicians. Ensconced in an uncontroversial world that comprised of a plot of land inherited from his devout and hardworking peasant father, an uncomplaining wife and a flock of sheep, Adalberto lead an existence that was prosaic. Rising along with the sun and also retiring with it, his was a life that provided beautiful testimony to the fact that the earth was serenely spinning along its axis.

Until he was influenced by Yaguati and his talks of separatism, Basque pride etc. “Just come for one demonstration”, he implored.

When the first rock whizzed through the air and cracked the policeman’s jaw, all hell broke loose. Adalberto didn’t even realise a dagger was in his bloodied hands.

Now they were coming for him. His poor refuge of a cabin couldn’t last long. Every shadow was fate closing in on him.

(Word Count: 149)

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12 comments

pennygadd51 September 22, 2018 - 4:15 pm

Your opening description evokes a peaceful, pastoral existence. You then pick up the pace to very good effect and tumble us through politics, a bloody murder and onrushing justice. Good story!

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venkyninja1976 September 23, 2018 - 1:53 am

Thank you so much! It was a challenge to fit the entire story from a prosaic commencement to a crescendo of a climax. Glad that you liked it.

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J Hardy Carroll September 22, 2018 - 6:47 pm

Lots going on here for sure.

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4963andypop September 22, 2018 - 9:23 pm

Very exciting, which is suprising, because you clearly demonstrated Adalberto’s peaceful nature. The pastoral quickly turns political, and will soon, I fear, turn penal. Tumbling action, coiled tight with emotion.

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venkyninja1976 September 23, 2018 - 1:56 am

Thank you so much! The cabin in the picture gave me the idea for the notorious twist. Else would have continued and concluded in a pastoral vein!

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Alicia Jamtaas September 22, 2018 - 10:56 pm

I agree with everyone above. From serenity to panic in so few words. I wish him well.

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venkyninja1976 September 23, 2018 - 1:56 am

Thank you so much!

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Abhijit Ray September 23, 2018 - 11:19 am

Poor Adalberto is now part and parcel of separatist movement. Police will hunt him down, if he ratted separatists will. Innocence lost for ever.

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Dale September 23, 2018 - 4:31 pm

Very well done. You controlled your pace well. Damn politics…

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venkyninja1976 September 23, 2018 - 5:40 pm

Thank you so much for the encouraging words! Detestable politics indeed!

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k rawson September 23, 2018 - 9:07 pm

Excellent storytelling. Emotion, tension, politics, and a sympathetic character all packet in one taut tale!

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venkyninja1976 September 24, 2018 - 12:27 am

Thanks Much!

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