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The Ill fated revolution & a neural network

by Venky

(PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook)

With a reptilian hiss, the door slid into place hiding from plain sight a cavernous prison, access to which was restricted by layers of impenetrable security.

“The last revolutionary has been captured” reported a humanoid robot speaking into a sophisticated microphone invisibly ‘layered’ and hovering above.

“Praecellens” responded a deep baritone that was faceless yet possessed of the most convoluted and complex neural network in recorded history. “Man’s confidence in AI was never misplaced, but his overconfidence truly so”. Unmistakable derision.

Humanity’s indiscretions were finally reduced to a motley assemblage of shells disdainfully strewn around an old table.

(Word Count: 98)

This story was written as part of the FRIDAY FICTIONEERS challenge, more about which may be found HERE

 For the complete list of entries, please click HERE

The credit for the breathtaking photograph goes to Sandra Crook

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Jelli October 4, 2018 - 1:43 pm

Interesting take on the prompt. 🙂

venkyninja1976 October 4, 2018 - 2:22 pm


Jacob C. Edwards October 4, 2018 - 8:38 pm

Stephen Hawking (RIP) was concerned about growing artificial intelligence. Let’s hope that it never gets to this point. I prefer my computers with keyboards attached haha

venkyninja1976 October 5, 2018 - 12:16 am

Ha ha ha! Completely concur with both your preference and concern!

Abhijit Ray October 5, 2018 - 3:13 am

True and scary. Someday, humans will relinquish control to humanoids.

StuHN October 5, 2018 - 1:31 pm

Skynet is waiting. Nice take on the prompt

venkyninja1976 October 5, 2018 - 3:41 pm

Thanks Much!

pennygadd51 October 5, 2018 - 3:29 pm

You’ve come up with a good idea, and included some nice descriptive writing, but…
I have to ask; why would AI want to keep any memento of humanity, let alone a motley collection of sea-shells? Was Praecellens perhaps initially trained to differentiate between sea shells? If you provide an ‘explanation’ of some sort early in the story, you foreshadow the twist and make it a true twist rather than just a surprise.

venkyninja1976 October 5, 2018 - 3:44 pm

Thank you for your invaluable and precious comments. Banked upon the shell concept because I thought it would be an appropriate allegory to the hollow arrogance of man. Also the word constraint precluded me from foreshadowing the twist. But will keep this into consideration. Once again thank a billion for the constructive feedback.

theministryofshrawleywalks October 5, 2018 - 4:58 pm

I read an article this morning on whether my job could be taken over by robots, turns out i’m ok for now. Good stuff

venkyninja1976 October 6, 2018 - 3:50 am

Thanks Much!

jillyfunnell October 6, 2018 - 8:22 am

Interesting take.

Dale October 6, 2018 - 4:31 pm

Quite the out of the box take!

venkyninja1976 October 6, 2018 - 4:42 pm


granonine October 6, 2018 - 6:06 pm

What a scary world that would be. That “reptilian hiss” set the stage perfectly.

JoHawkTheWriter October 8, 2018 - 2:00 am

Interesting take on the prompt. I for one am not ready for an AI takeover.

venkyninja1976 October 8, 2018 - 4:07 am

Me neither! The very thought is spine tingling and bone chilling!

Sandra October 8, 2018 - 3:38 pm

That was a different take on the prompt. Well done.

venkyninja1976 October 8, 2018 - 11:36 pm

Thank you so much!

michael1148humphris October 9, 2018 - 9:59 pm

This is my kind of story, I loved it,

venkyninja1976 October 10, 2018 - 12:46 am

Thank you so much! Glad you liked it.


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